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Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2015 10:15 am
by Alicorn
Promise's anti-Master precautions would have worked against Chelasi too, but she wouldn't have snapped out of it afterwards, because Chelasi's results had more inertia.

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2015 10:21 am
by DanielH
I agree with Ezra.

What exactly did Promise have Yellow order her? If that was mentioned I don’t remember it.

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2015 10:24 am
by Alicorn
I didn't put it onscreen, as a "Promise is better at this than I am" precaution, but fragments of the orders appeared in narration when she first encountered Glory Girl and when she was fighting Cherish.

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2015 12:16 pm
by Ezra
I didn't pick up either time that those were orders and not just thoughts. If it comes up again, could we have a clearer indication?

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2015 12:34 pm
by Alicorn
Maybe. I like the tone of doing it this way, but I might find a way to clarify without wrecking it.

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2015 12:55 pm
by DanielH
I eventually picked up on it the time with Cherish, but not Glory Girl. I think that simply italicizing the parenthetical orders would be enough to distinguish them as orders, without changing the tone much.

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2015 1:21 pm
by Alicorn
Italics I can do.

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2015 12:46 pm
by Ezra
Panacea and Promise start with P, so the only one left out of that theme is Glory Girl / Aura. But if the P names were too short-supplied, the Victoria clones could have gone with G names or A names, and then she wouldn't have been left out.

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2015 9:40 pm
by anthusiasm
Finally catching up on this sandbox and omg Promise interacting with the human world is So Great. New OTP: Promise/the internet.

Also Canary is a Cute and Amy needs a hug.

Re: Sandbox Discussions

Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2015 11:14 pm
by DanielH
She just said that she would prefer not to be shipped, and you go and ship her with who she told that to.

I do kinda agree, though.